8 Mistakes to Avoid in a Transfer Application Essay

1) Don’t Sound Negative

Even though you’re leaving your current school for negative reasons, you have to be strategic in how you explain them so you don’t sound like you’re complaining. It’s a difficult balance to strike, for sure, but you have to be very concrete in what change you’re looking for so it doesn’t sound like you’re bad-mouthing your current situation (or worse, not appreciating it for superficial reasons like rankings).

You don’t want to sound like you're making excuses and not taking the initiative to make your current college work for you. You want it to seem like you've exhausted every resource and really belong somewhere else. Listing specific examples of what is missing will help with this, in addition to listing what you hope to have at your next school.

2) Don’t Diss Your Current School

If, for example, you find your current curriculum constraining, explain in concrete detail how it limits your ability to take additional classes outside of your major. Maybe giving an example of the type of liberal arts curriculum you prefer is more effective.

Or if you feel that your current school is not academically challenging, that alone feels very negative. Instead, name specific types of challenging classes that are missing or specific types of classes that you hope to take in your next school. Not sounding negative is the #1 key to transfer essay success.

3) Add Specific Examples of What’s Missing

For example, if you’re looking for a better Silicon Valley connection, instead of saying your current school doesn’t have a strong entrepreneurial bent, it would be more effective to explain how there are no resources for future entrepreneurs and you've exhausted all the options in finding them.

Are there no entrepreneur clubs or business-oriented classes? Is there no tech hub in your current school? By naming specific facts like these, you're making your case objectively instead of sounding subjective.

You don't want to sound in any way holier-than-thou, like you’re better than your current school. It's more effective to say something like, "While stimulating and exciting, the liberal arts curriculum does not focus on career-oriented classes for entrepreneurship, which is the key to success in my future field." The more specific your examples are, the less negative this comes across.

4) Focus on Your New School’s Advantages

Another solution is to flip the perspective to say what type of environment you're hoping for so you don't come across as unnecessarily negative. For example, are there any professors you’re interested in working with at the new school? Does your new school have a unique internship program or research opportunity that most undergraduate schools don’t offer? Flipping the perspective and focusing on what you’re hoping to find next is a great way to avoid the negative trap.

5) Show What’s Changed Since High School

Perhaps you’ve had a revelation freshman year about your new career path—and unfortunately your current school doesn’t have a strong program for it. You have to be really clear about this change. What changed since you first applied senior year of high school? What changed in the past year you've been at your current school?

Another crucial thing here is to answer the deeper “why” of the change; otherwise it will sound hollow and superficial. If you decided you want to focus on social impact, for instance, tell us what made you realize you wanted to make a difference. Why all of a sudden did you care about how many people you could impact? That's a pretty major paradigm shift - major decisions like these don't happen lightly everyday.

It’s harder to be invested in your growth without that necessary self-reflection. Remember that admissions officers expect a higher level of maturity in a transfer essay, so diving deeper into your past motivations is crucial in showing that. Those self-aware details make all the difference in which types of stories leave an impression with the admissions officers and which types of stories get skimmed and forgotten.

6) Add Clear Objectives For Your Transfer
If you’re transferring to pursue a different major or career, be really specific about your future goals. Let’s say you decided to change your major from literature to gender studies. Give the admissions officers a sense of how you will pursue this new academic passion.

How do you hope to develop this topic and educate others? Do you want to pursue a master’s or PhD in the topic, for example? There’s no pressure to stick to this plan of course, but it would be good to reference some kind of path if possible so you seem forward-thinking. Knowing that would also helping you explain your reasons for transferring better since the new school might have a better path and resources fo a PhD for example.

7) Don’t Waste Word Count 

Instead of listing extracurriculars they will see in your Activities page, dive deeper into one of the activities that relates to your transfer. Your essay should present or develop new information they can’t find anywhere else in your application.

For example, did you pursue your new passions by enrolling in summer school or reading books outside of class for your own curiosity? Definitely make that clear since that’s impressive and shows initiative.

Any recent accomplishment should be added to your application. You want to impress the admissions officers and not taking credit for your wins seems like a missed opportunity.

8) Own Your Mistakes in High School

When explaining your reasons for transferring, aim to sound less negative and more proactive. Everything is about tone and you want to sound like you take accountability for any past mistakes in addition to doing everything you could to make the most of your current situation. Anything else will read like a red flag to admissions officers.

If you have poor grades in high school, be specific about why. If you were busy with other projects, take accountability with something like: "My grades suffered as I spent most of my time building and running 3 apps and 2 websites." Details like these are important to show that you weren't just a delinquent kid in high school, but a passionate and talented inventor who had trouble balancing finals on top of being your own CEO. Quantifiable details like these really make a difference.

And whatever you do, make sure you take accountability. Instead of saying you were pressured into attending a lower-tiered school, rephrase that loaded language a tad more sensitively. What kind of high school did you go to? Was it a large public school with few guidance resources? Why were you discouraged from applying to other schools? Who specifically discouraged you? Why and how exactly were you pressured to choose this school? Saying you were pressured to go deprives you of agency, and does not make you look good because you are blaming people and finding excuses instead of taking responsibility, which is a major red flag to admissions officers. How honestly you phrase this situation is key to your transfer success.