Shocker Alert: UVA Gives Wealthy Applicants Admissions Priority
/- Oh boy...The University of Virginia allegedly kept track of applicants with wealthy relatives to offer them special admission. You assumed this kind of thing happens; well the Post's got the receipts. [Teen Vogue]
- Which may explain why Princeton is scrambling to block the release of its own admission records [BuzzFeed]
- And don't stress too much: all the blood, sweat & tears you put into your application only takes 4 minutes to read [HuffPo]

Overusing adverbs (basically, essentially, actually) means that your verbs are not strong enough on their own. Wordy phrases and fragments slow down your narrative. Pedantic words like “myriad” and “plethora” should only be used if you know what they mean - otherwise you come across as someone disingenuous who used athesaurus to sound smarter (something admissions officers can easily see through.)
Inspired by Karyn, here are a few more things I would add to your admissions essay checklist for before you submit: