The Personal Approach to the Personal Statement
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Break The Essay Down Into Smaller Goals
Just thinking of writing the enire personal statement in its entirety is pretty overwhelming. Instead, create smaller, less-stressful goals. Start with brainstorming topic ideas, then journal some outline ideas, then try writing the first paragraph. If you’re still stuck, start with just a sentence. The important thing is to just start: the magic is in the revision process. No one — not even your favorite published author — weaves gold on the first try.
Read More1) Don’t Sound Negative
Even though you’re leaving your current school for negative reasons, you have to be strategic in how you explain them so you don’t sound like you’re complaining. It’s a difficult balance to strike, for sure, but you have to be very concrete in what change you’re looking for so it doesn’t sound like you’re bad-mouthing your current situation (or worse, not appreciating it for superficial reasons like rankings).
You don’t want to sound like you're making excuses and not taking the initiative to make your current college work for you. You want it to seem like you've exhausted every resource and really belong somewhere else. Listing specific examples of what is missing will help with this, in addition to listing what you hope to have at your next school.
Read More1) Make a list of all your updates since you submitted the original application
Start by thinking through every category of your life: academics, extracurriculars, personal, family, etc. Then write a bullet point list of every update you can think of for each category. Once you’re done, pick the most exciting and impressive updates to share for one powerhouse paragraph of examples. Think: winning an award, receiving a grant, making it to the championship, etc. The goal of the update paragraph is to show why you’re a great pick for the college.
Another great way of using the update paragraph is to hone in on your brand and remind the admissions officers that you’re passionate about climate change, for example. Remember to tie in academics too: how you were able to maintain or improve your grades despite harder classes and more extracurricular involvement.
Read MoreTOPIC 1: Redefining Masculinity While Growing Up With Two Moms
SUCCESS RATE: Accepted to all 10 schools he applied to, including Cornell University, Dartmouth College, Yale University, Princeton University, and the Massachusetts Institute of Technology.
WHY IT WORKED: Colleges want to see 1) exceptional students who overcome adversity because it shows strength and 2) students who are not afraid to challenge societal norms, because that takes risk. This essay manages to do both.
Read MoreI read every college admissions update so you don’t have to. In this edition:
In a surprising twist, white men are the latest casualty of Trump’s higher education DEI ban. [Washington Post]
“Brown University accepted nearly equal numbers of male and female prospects, though, like some other schools, it got nearly twice as many female applicants. That math meant it was easier for male students to get in — 7 percent of male applicants were admitted, compared with 4.4 percent of female applicants, university data shows. The Trump administration’s policies may soon put an end to that advantage enjoyed by men at some colleges, admissions and higher-education experts say.
Over the years, I’ve read and edited hundreds of college application essays. I’ve seen the good and bad (and very bad). Discover how to avoid the Common App essay's most common mistakes.
1) Using Bloated Thesaurus Speak
Most students think a higher vocabulary (read: thesaurus) will make their essay sound better. That instinct may work for your more formal academic essays, but it’s wrong in the case of the personal statement: the essay should sound how you speak, not a formal academic letter. "Thenceforward" and “heretofore,” for example, seem way too formal and almost sound funny in this personal context. Would you ever use those words in real life? Didn’t think so.
Read More1) Use specific examples to explain your struggles
Successful essay excerpt: “Growing up in a small, conservative community, it's easy to be shoved into your own category if you don't look or act like everyone else. My hair and eyes, instead of being blonde and blue like all of my Czech classmates, were chocolate and espresso. My last name had a "z" in it, and my grandmother called me "mija." By the time I was in grade school, the teasing began, and I was hurt and confused. Didn't all grandmothers call their grandchildren "mija"? Why did everyone except for me have blue eyes? And why was I being called "dirty Mexican" when I was cleaner than the boy who made the remark?” Christina, Yale Class of 2022
Why this works: This paragraph highlights how easy it is to be ostracized in your community due to your external differences. Christina was proud to be Hispanic, but the consistent bullying she received from her peers made it hard for her to keep that perspective on her heritage. This section of her essay portrays her struggle with racism and she later uses it to show her evolution of understanding her own culture as well as that of people around her.
Read MoreSo, you’ve been revising until your eyes gloss over? Words are all starting to look the same and you’re reciting your admissions essay in your sleep? Professional authors spend a long time figuring out just what proofreading process works for them. Here’s the trick for the last step of this writing process: start off with plenty of material (don’t worry about word count until that whole story is there on the page) and then get ready to polish it using the following tips.
Read MoreThat sound you hear is the sound of hundreds of thousands of seniors frantically scurrying to finish their admissions essay. I often get asked on the merits of applying early because of the supposed higher admit rates. My quick take? I applied regular because I knew my essay wasn’t ready. My long take? See the answers below, inspired by my advice on applying early, which was recently featured in this helpful U.S News article.
Read More1) You’re way under word count
If you really have enough to say, you will struggle with the 650-word count, often going far beyond that. In fact, for that reason, I advise all my students to ignore word count completely at the drafting stage. If your draft is under, that’s usually a clear-cut sign that this topic might work better as a supplement or that you didn’t dig deeper enough for a vulnerable self-reflection to take your topic to the next level. Most students end up drafting thousands of words and then cut it down in the revision process to 650 words.
Read MoreAt this point in your academic career, you’ve heard of the creative writing mantra — show, don’t tell. You want the admissions officers to live out the story as you did by engaging them in every nitty-gritty detail. But what does that actually mean and how do you do that? I broke down the technique in five easy-to-follow suggestions from admissions essays that worked.
Read MoreCalling all juniors! Who’s ready to tackle the dreaded Common App personal essay this summer?
Starting this August, I’ll be accepting a limited number of students to my virtual Summer Essay Bootcamp covering everything from finding your topic to editing your draft. This limited series of virtual admissions essay classes provides hands-on help for those on a budget. There are currently only 3 sessions available with a maximum student limit for each (some at just 5 students per session!) to ensure personalized attention, so don’t hesitate to save your spot.
Read MoreColleges track your every digital move on their site
First, every college gathers data about applicable students ranging from SAT/ACT scores to geographic location to see if they’re desirable. Then, they track your digital footprint probably as a way of determining “demonstrated interest.”
1) Start a Journal
The hardest thing about a personal essay is finding your voice—most high schools focus on the academic essay, which is more stiff and formulaic than the admissions essay. An easy way to discover what you sound like when you're not citing academic sources or analyzing text is to start a journal. Every night before bed, take a few minutes to write about your day or what's worrying you or even try some of the prompts in the Common App. The relaxing background should let you tap into your personal voice without the pressure of sounding academic. At the very least, you'll have some snippets saved away for the draft writing stage.
The waitlist letter is your last chance to show “demonstrated interest” and maybe get on the admit list if enough students don’t accept. In fact, some colleges are notorious for accepting fewer students than they need and then filling up their freshman class with the waitlist (this way, they get higher on the US News & World rankings…sneaky, I know). So you may have a better shot than you think. Especially this year when your chances of getting in are better than ever. At the very least, you’ll know you’ve done everything you could.
1) Find Your Specific Admissions Representative
Read More1) If you need help proofreading your admissions essay
I’ve been using Grammarly as an additional pair of eyes, and love it! It’s a (free) tool that can catch typos, which is so important when proofreading your Common App before submission. I already discussed the secrets to proofreading your admissions essay, but this is a great secondary tool to use in addition to reading the draft out loud and showing it to someone who’s never seen it. Of course, no online tool can compare to an experienced editor, but this a wonderful supplement if your eyes are losing focus. Just download the Chrome extension and boom! Good to go.
Read MoreAngel had a unique situation. She was applying as an internal transfer to NYU Stern from NYU CAS (College of Arts and Sciences), which is notoriously difficult to accomplish. We knew she needed a standout transfer essay to explain why this major switch was necessary.
Read MoreThis memoir is a beautiful account of surviving an extreme Mormon survivalist sect so against the “government” that she grew up without a birth certificate. Westover details being forced to do dangerous hard labor as a kid and being abused by an older brother whose mental health issues are ignored and denied. The story is ultimately inspiring: She went on to graduate from Cambridge with a history PhD.
Good for: Writing about a complicated family upbringing
Get inspired by: Great examples of deep self-reflection and answering the “why.” Westover has had years to process what happened to her (hopefully with therapy), so she is able to describe her past in a way that is deep but not accusatory. When writing about abuse, the tone is really important in showing how you overcame the adversity, and Westover’s descriptions are a good example of showing hurt without sounding bitter, which is a hard balance to strike when writing about something so personal.
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